Friday, November 23, 2012

Until Then..

Foraying into new territories. Novice attempts at feelings-y, short story writing.

Listening to the familiar notification alert, she absently touches the whatsapp icon on her sleek new smart phone.
“What’s up, Dumpy?”
“What what?”
“Had a bad day dude. Made an utter fool of myself today with a couple of Mumbai wala managers :|
“Who who?”
“One Anand Pandey and one..something Phadnis”
“Yeah..your floor?”
“Yes. Both are fools.”
She allows herself a little smile.
“Ahan? Why so? They threw so much attitude man.”
“They do only that best. One is a serious retard. The other chews paan and spits it everywhere.”
She giggles a little bit now. She also has the sense to understand that ABC corp has more sense than to employ Manager cadre people of such descriptions, especially in its Mumbai office.
Still, she eggs him on.
“Oh yuck! :D”
“And you know the best part?”
“Oh there is a BEST part to this? :P”
“He offers me a drop and Im sitting in the passenger seat, and he spits right in front of me, at  XYX gate. And it all layers on his limited edition City. It is so easy to spot his car in the parking :P”
She snorts.
“HAHAHA :D :D ok that made me laugh :P”
“Ok ok. Bye Dumpy. I’ll sleep now.”
“Ok bye :) :)
She doesn’t create a fuss about the abrupt ending of the chat. She had a problem with it when they were seeing each other. And a problem with his aversion to smileys. But as she warmed up to everything about him, their families got colder. Eventually both of them decided that it was futile to carry a relationship that caused so much heartburn to everybody else forward.
“Hummm.” She locks her phone and turns her bed side lamp off, the shadow of a smile still lingering on her lips.
A few hundred kilometers away he buries himself under blankets, trying to keep warm. He understands he will never be able to be there for her all the time, like he strives to, now. Just as much as he cannot stand to watch her sadness, he knows that he will never be able to turn her lips up, like he just did now, forever.
Still, he vows to himself, reading her gay, laughter filled text once more, Until that day comes- until then, I will make sure she never, ever stops smiling.


Someday's dreamer said...

Me likey :D

Kappu said...

It's very sweet! A something that most of us brushed shoulders with :)

Kally said...
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Kally said...

It does stir the feelings!!

So everyone has touched upon these topics ugh!

One suggestion...keep d conversation little longer..just little...I meant the conversation sentences....not just 3 or 4 words in a sentence throughout the story...else it will appear as a story from comic book....This one didn't look that way...but have seen few stories falling like that....

Keep writing Gita!!

mahesh said...

So in the author's mind do the hero and heroine meet again for a happy life ever after or they decide to break up and just send sugary smiley-filled smses :)

Why does this sound so-so-so familiar :(?

Soumya said...

Wow this was awesome :)

True story?

gitanjali said...

@ Jenny- Thanks baby :) for the inbox-ed comments also :D

@Kappu- Isn't it? :) Thanks! We missed you at the meet! :(

@Kally- Ugh? :P LOL, thanks for the criticism, you! Will ensure, next time :)

gitanjali said...

@Mahesh-Ah, interesting :) Lets say they meet up n patch up n have a sugary ending :) And that will be your story too, just watch :)

gitanjali said...

@Soumya- word for word :)Thank you :)

mahesh said...

New template looks cool :)

And thanks for the wishes :)!